stray thoughts aimless of the target
constructing and destructing what's said before
an unnarrated dialogue between
mirrors and screens
punctuated by pulsing plosives
and caffeinated lights
when I write
my jaw tightens up
but it's so soothing when the world is rough
to taste beach rocks chattering in the tide
hear Cyprus trees
see cinnamon tingle my tongue
and the wake in the water
reflect the glistening gold
sun of a million years ago
17 comments:
Thanks bard. Glad you like...
Thanks brother. We write them but rarely have them written for us.
The verse takes me to my hardship and within that sufferings I find my bliss.
Thanks for this philosophical piece.
I should send that poem to my son who is a poet. I love it.
WOW...amazing.
Well written indeed.
And you addressed the number one health issue for poets-- you know, besides opiates, depression and alcohol -- TMJ. People need to know. The jaws of our nation's poets are at risk!
Lovely. I've been a bit uninspired of late, so I hope this shakes up my senses. I always relish a good dose of synesthesia.
Cool poem. I was wondering if it is a poem mainly for poets, should it be different than the other poems? if so different how?
Maybe it could be less structured, more playfull, exoplore more. Artist should understand that the search is important and has it s own rule.
Take care my friend
Cinnammon tingle in my tongue...ooooooooooooohhhh I love that!!!
Thanks for visiting...I would like to talk with you..love your poetry.
xo, Mango
when i read you
a stillness settles almost
breathless
i lean into your words
forgetful of all but this
moment
when i notice my single clenched fist
it opens
like a rose
walkingman,
glad you liked it... i had all my poet friends here in mind
Shubhajit,
Philosophical is a compliment here... i'm not sure that I am... though sometimes i aspire to be...
Michael,
send it on! nice to see you again...
Jenny,
Thanks! and welcome to my humble site... hope you'll drop by again for a visit
Jimmy,
High praise from the master! thanks mate... still waiting on the voucher for the pint
;)
LWW,
the jaws are indeed at risk... so much to say... perhaps the government is actually doing us a favor by cutting funding to the arts!
Francis,
glad you like the synesthesia here... i am a big fan of this knd of effect...
Mariana,
thanks for the suggestions... i'll keep this in mind when i do another edit and think if there's a place for this... disconnected and discombobulated is poets for sure... and for sure that's me
:)
Mango,
thanks for your comment... i'm up for continuing conversations about art and writing and whatever in the blogosphere is on your mind...
Harle,
lovely poetic lines you leave me... sometimes it's about breathing and release, eh? thanks for your thoughts...
This was indeed awesome Jon! The last 5 lines were very beautiful and evocative to me-all the best in the world to you!!
thanks devin... glad that this spoke to you... hope you're well and that the cat isn't giving you a hard time!
;)
Earthy and visceral, I like this very much, keep writing, thank you.
Hi Dianne,
Thanks for dropping by and for your kind comment... hope to see you around again...
Heyy
punctuated by pulsing plosives
was a very nice effort. I liked the poem, Jon.
Good to know you. :)
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